- Good SFX
- make more obvious differences between 1,2 and 3
- Train tannoy?! seems incongruous
- missing word
- levels go up and down during piano playing-double check
- ending
- piano too long/characters
- good became, catchy, intrigued
- tidy up editing
- jingles? fade out
- very abrupt ending
- make director voice through tannoy more mechanical
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